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Describing People
Using two attributes each, describe six different people: a woman, a man, a boy, a girl, you and me. Ex. The boy is young and tall.
Author:
nhatnam
nhatnam
I know a woman at Livemocha's community, there is possibly she married, but she like to learn a new language, and I am also learning English here.
Look in at her profile's picture, casually I 'm cherished her image in my heart. There is once, I and she, both is chatting online each other, the stories between two of we what seting up effervescent, suddenly there are a lot of noises... who is crying like a child's tones. "Sorry!" she said "I can't continue to chat with you now". Well! answered I hurry her but my own indefinite emotions within they're bursting unwilling.
Submitted: 2008-04-21 00:12:31
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I know my father, I know my mother, I know my brother, I know my sister, and I 'm also knew the some informations of them about the anxieties for tomorrow...
My father is an old man. He is tall and thin.
My mother is younger than him. She is fat and short. They are rich.
Regards
Maybe, I mistaked writing ways which among simple and complex. I described my submission like as a composition. Therefore, in the endodermis is nothing to emptiness excepting two words "as" too charmless !!
"When someone asks me a question about myself, everything is fine, but to answer them about somebody else poses a challenge. I know of a girl, who is my neighbor. I like her charming smile when the 2 of us are together. She also makes me laugh. (the rest doesn't make much sense but if i had to put what I think your trying to say it would be this) When the night was over, I would go to sleep having wonderful dreams of her. This wasn't easy to write continuously. I'm sorry."
I hope this helps
(married) Ok...
You're number one !
Thanks
Generally, when anyone directly asks me questions about myself, everything is fine. [or "I am fine with this."]
But to answer them about somebody else, it was a challenge....Indeed, I wouldn't want to! [this fixes the sentence structure, using the word "any" makes it ambiguous - are you talking about answering questions or about having challenges?]
I know a girl in my neighborhood; her house is next to my home.
[Correcting punctuation and spelling. Houses next to each other are side-by-side so it is better to simply use the word "next."
I am charmed by her smiles, her eyes and every time we meet, I laugh really hard (the ugly smiles!).
[Not sure if you really mean laugh - perhaps you break into a really big smile or you "can't help but be giddy when she appears."]
While at the night, in my sleep, images of her flicker and flow into the ecstasy of dreams. More stories and enjoyments remain, but it isn't easy writing to the end. I'm sorry !
[For compositions, it would sound better to say:
it isn't easy to finish writing ... or
it isn't easy writing it all down]
Excellent work though and quite complex, even for intermediate! The hard part is knowing the best idiom or structure to use.
Very pleasant in Livemocha with my community.
Sincerely.
Here It didn't must requested from us whats answer exactly the questions upon. But follow me, we mistook in the structural ways how wasn't got the good result. I will be try it until the full stars. Let help me from you all!
I can't change a my habit, Safu!
You affirm very exactly, Thanks so much!
"Describe someone you know. Who is the person? What does he or she look like"
My world what is only a imaginary world! Haha...ha how can I describe about a virtual image? Because, I am a blind man, even I looked carefully you, but I am still ambiguous that you are a woman :))
"Are you a man, when you were male, Saifu? "
I think we should go to Jessica to solve the above question.
"What are you a man or woman? when I saw you, It look like a beautiful woman and I want...to say other, but you are a male resembling me too! Thank Saifu.
Sorry, I'm learning English too... and I'm really bad in grammar.=)
Here, we would have pretended to converse together by our submissions. I think your comments will be exercise real to progress and to improve more skills of language than for our study.
Thanks, Huday!
I felt you enhanced me so!