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Transportation

What kind of transportation do you use to get around town? What kind of transportation do you use to go on trips?

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martha
I take short suit of bath, sun glasses, hat, trousers, sandals, blocking of sun, my children, the car and I go away to the beach
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Submitted: 2008-07-05 17:52:09



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  • DiscoisDiscoisD... - 2008-07-13 04:08:25
    I think you should have said 'I take a bathing suit'  instead of "I take a short suit of bath." Did you mean 'small' by "short?" "Sun glasses" is one word, so it should be 'sunglasses.'  The singular nouns that you listed should have 'a's in front of them so it should say 'a hat, and not just "hat." 'Blocking of sun' should be "sunblock," and the 'and' should go before the last noun that you list-- so it should be: "and the car." The 'and' that's before "I go to the beach" should be changed to 'when.'

    So... "I take a small bathing suit, sunglasses, a hat, trousers, sandals, sunblock, my children, and the car when I go away to the beach." 
     
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