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A Shopping Trip
Write about the last time you went shopping. What were you shopping for? What did you buy? Who did you go with?
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mishaikh
mishaikh
Last week I went the books market to buy some books. I bought Jameel Uddin Aali's "Aadmi". I already have his "Urmghan-e-Aali". I also bought Dan Brown's Davinci Code in spite I have already read this book. I already have his "Deception Point". I already have the seven books of Harry Potter though this fancy seems to be for children, but it has fascinated the grownups also. I am very fond of books and reading. I am a habitual reader.
Since my early school days I have always loved and enjoyed reading books. I vividly remember the time of my school days when I would very earnestly buy story books of fairy tales from one of the roadside book vendors, who used to sell books near our house. Prior to my school age I used to ask my mother to read story for me. My mother had only the basic knowledge of reciting Holy Quraan. She also could read small books in our native language. Once she said to me why I would not learn reading if so interested in stories. (Complete version is as under:)
Submitted: 2008-08-20 13:16:39
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Since my early school days I have always loved and enjoyed reading books. I vividly remember the time of my school days when I would very earnestly buy story books of fairy tales from one of the roadside book vendors, who used to sell books near our house. Prior to my school age I used to ask my mother to read story for me. My mother had only the basic knowledge of reciting Holy Quraan. She also could read small books in our native language. Once she said to me why I would not learn reading if so interested in stories. Then she taught how to read Urdu, which I learned prior to going school.
Reading books has always fascinated me and given me enormous satisfaction. With the passage of time this book reading habit of mine has grown stronger and stronger with the desire to read more and more whatever comes to my hand, even the scrap of papers, as I enjoy reading books the way I used to enjoy them in my childhood. I had never found a best friend more than books. They always communicated with me and I never find any difficulty to comprehend them.
Books are the best source of learning; they polish and build up one's personality and slowly and gradually they work as a mechanism process of building confidence, and eventually the reader learns the way of dealing with people.
All those books I have read so far have acted like true friends to me and helped me in nurturing my personality in a positive and strong manner, giving me tremendous confidence and insight into life. (Remaining part below:)
Very well written. And above all I've enjoyed the very theme of your writing.
Some REALLY MINOR corrections as compared to your work:
"Last week I went (TO) the (BOOK) market to buy some books. I bought (Jameel-Ud-Din) Aali's... this fancy seems to be for children but it has fascinated the grownups (TOO) / this fancy seems to be for children but it (ALSO) has fascinated the grownups... basic knowledge of reciting (THE) Holy Quraan... Once she said to me (THAT) why I would not learn reading... she taught (ME) how to read Urdu... prior (GOING TO) school... as I (STILL) enjoy reading books the way I used to enjoy them in my childhood..."
Substitute the word fantasy for fancy.
Good writing!
Last week I went to the book market to buy some books. I bought Jameel Uddin Aali's "Aadmi". I already have his book "Urmghan-e-Aali". I also bought Dan Brown's Da Vinci Code in spite of the fact that I have already read this book. I already have his book "Deception Point". I already have the seven books of Harry Potter even though this fantasy seems to be for children, but it has fascinated the grownups also. I am very fond of books and reading. I am a habitual reader.
Since my early school days I have always loved and enjoyed reading books. I vividly remember the time of my school days when I would very earnestly buy story books of fairy tales from one of the roadside book vendors, who used to sell books near our house. Prior to being of school age I used to ask my mother to read stories for me. My mother had only the basic knowledge of reciting Holy Qur’an. She also could read small books in our native language. Once she said to me why would I not learn to read if I was so interested in stories. Then she taught me how to read Urdu, which I learned prior to going school.
Reading books has always fascinated me and given me enormous satisfaction. With the passage of time this book reading habit of mine has grown stronger and stronger with the desire to read more and more, whatever comes to my hand, even the scraps of paper, as I enjoy reading books the way I used to enjoy them in my childhood. I have never found a best friend more than books. They always communicate with me and I never find any difficulty in comprehending them.
Books are the best source of learning; they polish and build up one's personality and slowly and gradually they work as a mechanism process of building confidence, and eventually the reader learns the way of dealing with people.
....remaining part below :)
All these books I have read so far have acted like true friends to me and helped me in nurturing my personality in a positive and strong manner, giving me tremendous confidence and insight into life.
Today when I am very much in the midst of practical life I feel proud to call all those books my true friends and teachers, from whom I have learnt a lot.
Excelent job! Sorry I had a connect problem in my computer, so I didn't comment before.