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• 2008-08-11 23:20:05

  mishaikh
  

  The Complete Version of "Giving n Receiving" God crated His most beautiful creation “us” the human being, and adorned “us’ with “Relations”. All relations; Blood or the ones we make ourselves like “Friendship” or “Love” based on emotions. It is in our instinct, to make relations or to strengthen the existing ones, we give and take presents. So to maintain the equilibrium between emotional relations ‘give and take’ is the formula. Love is possibly the most powerful and potentially the most beautiful gift we give or receive, and as I have said that all these relations are based on emotions. Emotions have a considerable effect on our lives. The feelings and thoughts that we harbor in our minds color our perceptions and dictate our actions which eventually dominate our lives. The very fact that the most pervasive of all the attributes of God is His “Compassion and mercy” , so it has been the Prophetic instructions to the people through out the human history to imbue themselves with these attributes of God. Thus the basic bond of the most fundamental human relationship is referred to as “love, compassion and mercy”, and this is the most beautiful gift we ever have, so let’s spread it all over humanity if we wish to make a heaven on earth.

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• 2008-08-12 01:50:42

  Linda
  

  "God created His most beautiful creation, 'us,' the human being, and adorned 'us' with relations. This is all relations: through blood or choice (such as friendship and love.) It is in our instincts to make new relationships and strengthen the existing ones. Maintaining an equilibrium between 'give' and 'take' in an emotional relationship is the key." "Love is possibly the most powerful and beautiful gift we can give or receive. As I have said before, all relationships are based on emotions. Emotions have a considerable effect on our lives. The feelings and thoughts we harbour in our minds determine our perceptions and dictate our actions. These perceptions and actions eventually dominate our lives." "The most pervasive of all God's attributes are His compassion and mercy. That is why it has been the Prophetic instructions throughout human history to imbue themselves with these attributes of God. “Love, compassion and mercy” are the basics of the most fundamental human relationship for this reason. Relationships are the most beautiful gift we will ever have, so if we wish to make a heaven on earth we should spread them all over humanity." Wow. What an impressive and long piece of writing. My main suggestion would be to write smaller sentences. All your ideas do not have to be crammed into one sentence, even if they are related. Your English is very good. You are beyond needing to learn vocabulary and grammar rules. Your sentences often have awkward wording. The best way to fix this is just to read English. The more you read, the more you will be able to make natural and flowing sentences. Keep up the good work!

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• 2008-08-12 03:11:42

  Sarah Jasmine
  

  Yes keep up the good work

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• 2008-08-12 09:57:58

  Sarah Emmanuel
  

  Hi Mishaikh, I would make some of the changes in your work as under: God created His most beautiful creation, 'us,' the human being (Because ‘us’ refers to more than one entity.) we give and take presents (I've use 'for this' in accordance to '...to make our relations strengthen or growing') ‘give and take’ is the formula. / (or simply you can say “ ‘give and take’ is the key.”) and as I have said that all these relations are based on emotions. There should not be any space between (through) and (out) in the word ‘throughout’ so let’s spread it all over humanity, if we wish to make a heaven on earth. (‘humanity’ refers to all mankind; a group of whole lot of people, therefore it must come with ‘the’.) (‘The’ is also used with universal truths.) Marvelously written!!

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• 2008-08-12 12:34:42

  mishaikh
  

  Sarah: Good suggestions, worth to keep in mind. I am happy to provide material to students like you Sarah to sharp their knowledge. Bye baita. Kush raho jitiraho.

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• 2008-08-12 16:06:57

  JoyceeDane
  

  They previous commentors said it all. Some corrections her and there. Overall: Very good.

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• 2008-08-12 23:45:46

  Lorraine
  

  Hi mishaikh, fantastic!! I agree with Sarah's corrections to your exercise, but overall, very well written :))

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• 2008-08-15 03:50:14

  Sarahmon
  

  Very interesting and Great. I have to try like you.

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