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Going Shopping

Describe the last time you went shopping. What did you buy? How much did it cost?

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Amber
Hmmm..!!!! Well i would be the one and only lady on this earth, who doesnt enjoy shopping, so i truely dont remember exactly when was the last time i visited the mall.. perhaps.. what i enjoy shopping most is my fiances shopping, so the last item i bought for him waz few shirts, which i bought from various places. and i dont wanna talk about the cost, because gifts are priceless
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Submitted: 2007-11-14 14:00:47



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  • 2007-11-14 17:34:31
    kelmarz
    Hi Amber, I'm not an English writing teacher but here is how I might have written this paragraph: "Well, I would be the only lady on this earth who doesn't enjoy shopping. So, I truly don't remember the last time I visited the mall. Perhaps, the shopping I enjoy most is for my fiancee. So, the last item I bought for him was a few shirts, which I bought from various places, and I don't want to talk about cost because gifts are priceless."
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